moon jumper

1999 - The first genetically altered teen created lives for three months. 2001 - The next teen lives for two years, and then suffers from heart attack. 2005 - Five ...

AN: This is the prologue for Past the Horizon . It's the story of Phoebe and Henry, and how they mature over a year due to their adventures, problems, etc. ...

Where's the link?

Sweet! I'm the first one! XD He was looking, searching for her. His obsession with her was to the point of terrifying . She crouched down lower into the darkness ...

Hey, I'm MJ. Can someone stop a river from running? Maybe with a dam or a deck. Life is like a river. It runs its course with it ending at ...

More Paragraph Splitting: :D Chapter Five Ryder ripped his lips off mine and shoved me away. I was still standing there shocked, my arms still holding the shape of his ...

Paragraph Splitting: :D Chapter Four It took us about 30 minutes to reach the mystery destination. Adrenaline pumping through my veins the whole way there, the sheer speed brought the ...

I'm going to separate your paragraphs again. Chapter Three My eyes nearly fell out of my head. My hands fluttered uselessly over his beautifully shattered body, it was as if ...

I'm going to break you're paragraphs up for you. Chapter Two A bright flashes of colour zoomed through my mind. People were screaming. I was walking to a place I ...

You might want to make him a little believable. He's prefect, well, no one's perfect! Maybe he could not be that attractive and his home is full of old stuff. ...

Wow, I'm feeling depressed now. XD You're awesome at creating mood, but I believe you need to add details of how Sophie died and what war went on. And the ...

Questions from the reader: Where are they? How could the two boys hold all of those weapons? Who was the large man? WHAT HAPPENED? Those are a few things to ...

Hey, I'm MJ. And Sam took everything I was going to say! XD So everything she said, I agree on. Anyway, I'm a Greeter, so...WELCOME TO YWS! If you're lost ...

Is it too late to join? Or can my character be an exchange student from another magic school?

Hey, I'm here to critique again! I distinctly heard the sound of rain drops; that’s what I first became aware of. I, however , was not cold or wet as ...